The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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The maps present the town
that is
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planned to be
and
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reconstrued.
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, It is shown that the centre of the town has less infrastructure and facilities, that are included
into
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the planned development. Centre now has one
unconvenient
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inconvenient
main road, the new plan, as it
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shown
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, suggests a circled road, surrounding all of the new facilities that are given. There are no facilities, except
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a park
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park
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parks
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,
school
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schools
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and shops. In
new
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the new
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given plan there is
also
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a park, which remains
,
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but declines in size. School
is
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also remains
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also
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remains at the same place,
however
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,
instead
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of declining, has been made bigger in
new
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the new
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suggested plan. It
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also given
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that the dual carriageway
were
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included
,
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when now it is only one Housing was replaced and
instead
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of
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it
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,it
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new housing will be constructed
on
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its place.
Bus
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A bus
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station, shopping centre and car park are going to
be build
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, instead".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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