The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
The maps present the town
that is
planned to be and
reconstrued.
Correct word choice
apply
Overall
, It is shown that the centre of the town has less infrastructure and facilities, that are included into
the planned development. Centre now has one Change preposition
in
unconvenient
main road, the new plan, as it Correct your spelling
inconvenient
Add a missing verb
is shown
shown
, suggests a circled road, surrounding all of the new facilities that are given.
There are no facilities, except Add the auxiliary verb
was shown
Correct article usage
a park
park
, Fix the agreement mistake
parks
school
and shops. In Fix the agreement mistake
schools
new
given plan there is Correct article usage
the new
also
a park, which remains,
but declines in size. School Remove the comma
apply
is
Change the verb form
also remains
also
remains at the same place, however
, instead
of declining, has been made bigger in new
suggested plan. It Add an article
the new
a new
also given
that the dual carriageway Add the auxiliary verb
is also given
were
includedChange the verb form
was
,
when now it is only one
Housing was replaced and Remove the comma
apply
instead
of Correct pronoun usage
apply
it
new housing will be constructed Add a comma
,it
on
its place. Change preposition
in
Bus
station, shopping centre and car park are going to Correct article usage
A bus
be build
.Change the verb form
be built
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