many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantegs of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
Generally, there are two kinds of
museums
. For some of them
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,them
people
must pay for visits. However
, others are free. There are benefits and drawbacks for both categories. The objective of this
essay is on the first category, which is that people
have to pay money to visit museums
. In my opinion, the benefits of charging people
to visit museums
outweigh the drawbacks.
There are some disadvantages for
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to
museums
that people
must pay for visiting them. Some people
can't afford to pay, So the
can't visit them and it affects the awareness of some Correct your spelling
they
history
part of Replace the word
historical
people
which they might find out anywhere else. Also
, some artworks might not be understand
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understood
it
just by reading Correct pronoun usage
apply
it
on the internet or Correct pronoun usage
them
book
. Change preposition
in book
For example
, almost everyone sees the MonaLisa
picture, but when Correct your spelling
Mona Lisa
people
see the original painting they find the masterpiece of Davinci.
Advantages of getting money for museums
which I agree about that are more. First reason, some stuffs
need Change the wording
stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
to
maintenance and security, Change preposition
apply
the
money that Correct word choice
and the
people
charge for visiting museums
can help. For instance
, some statues need to be cleaned every two weeks, so without enough budget it may not be happen
, and they may be destroyed. Change the verb form
happen
another
reason is thatCorrect your spelling
Another
,
it helps on growth economicRemove the comma
apply
,
because for some artworks or historical Remove the comma
apply
museums
tourists come from all over the world to see it and they bring cash flow with them, Add a comma
,museums
moreover
charges museums
makes a job opportunity.
In conclusion, the benefits of charging people
for museums
are more than unpaid museums
. And I think this
is a true statement.Submitted by shahab_e2020 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite