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Education for young people is important in many countries. However, some people think that governments should spend more money on education in adult population who cannot read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is often argued that government need to invest more
money
 to improve the literacy of
adults
. I mostly agree with
this
 viewpoint because all humans have a right to learn without any discrimination. In
this
 essay, I will explain my opinion about adult learners. On the one hand, it is understandable why people want to spend more
money
for
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 young students. First of all, young students will be the root of
this
 society. They need to support our country in the future.
For example
, all
expense
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expenses
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of
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money
cann
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can
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invest
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for
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 the future. Those youth will grow up and support our country soon.
Moreover
, the young can run fast. It means that they can make the result easily compare to the elder.
On the other hand
, the decision of
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government
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 by the economy. Congress
sould
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should
could
 decide more expense of it.
To begin
 with, it is the basic right to be educated.
However
, many
adults
 could not get many chances to learn when they need because of
lack
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 of
education
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an education
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 system for
adults
.
Furthermore
,
literacy
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the literacy
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 of citizens is very important to keep
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social networks.
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An adult
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Adult
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Adults
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 who
are
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 not able to
reading
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read
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 and
writing
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 can be isolated from society. It could cause
anther
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 problem and we need to pay to fix it. In
conclustion
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conclusion
,
although
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money
for
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 the youth, I believe that we have to invest more
money
to
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 the
adults
 who want to learn how to read and write. It can make everyone protect their own right.
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  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

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  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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