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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. Whats is your opinion about this?

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Nowadays, because of the increasing population, more houses are required for accommodation purposes and
due to
 the lack of available space to construct them, the countryside becomes an interesting option for it. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of it and
finally
, in the end, I will conclude by stating my opinion. The rise in the number of people and the lack of area for their stay is a genuine issue and new plans and strategies are there in place to solve that problem. The requirement for more can be solved by expanding the reach of humans to the suburbs of the city and in
this
 way, the growing concern can be tackled. To understand
this
, more and more countries with a huge increment in the number of individuals have
such
 schemes in place and examples can include the United States and India. Many projects of
such
 type have been successfully implemented in the past and in future many more will be accomplished.
On the contrary
, there are
also
 downsides to it, like it can lead to the encroachment and potential loss of Mother Nature
due to
 it and can
also
 affect the whole ecosystem.
Further
, it can
also
 indirectly affect global warming of the planet and increase the carbon footprint. Sometimes, we as an earthly
being
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 can get carried away by our magnificent dreams which are largely driven by our own pride and ego and we collectively can accelerate the damage by taking more than required as per our needs. Examples of it can include the great cases of the past where we exploited the resources and it came back to bite us afterwards like over-exploitation of petroleum, wood etc.
Overall
, concluding it, the pros of it are there but only if other counter-measures like that of planting more trees in response to the damage being done are in place, as the steps to move beyond the confined limit
is
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 a necessity in the current times.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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