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The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.

The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.
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The given line graph below illustrates UK acid rain
emissions
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, measured in
millions
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 of
tonnes
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, from four different
sectors
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 from 1990 to 2007.
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, it can clearly be seen that the
emissions
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 rates from
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the eceltricity
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eceltricity
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electricity
, gas and water supply sector
was
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 the highest at
start
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the start
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 of the period,
then
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 decreased dramatically throughout
given
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 period. Meanwhile, the
emissions
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 rates of other
sectors
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 remained stable. In terms of the sector providers with the highest and the lowest
emissions
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 rates, the electricity, gas and water supply
sectors
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 stood at a peak
just
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of just
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 below 3.5
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millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
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 in 1991. It
then
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 went down significantly to 0.5
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millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
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 in 2007. Meanwhile, the domestic
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sectors
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sector
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 was the smallest at
start
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the start
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 just above 0.5
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
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,
then
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 it decreased slightly
approximately
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to approximately
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 0.3
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
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in
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at
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 the end of
given
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a given
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 period. Regarding
to
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the other
sectors
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,
the
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apply
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transport and communication stood at about 0.7
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millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
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 in 1991,
then
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 it remained stable throughout the year until it overlapped the electricity, gas and water supply
sectors
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 in 2003 and it experienced a
slightly
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 increase before experiencing a slight decrease at around 0.7
millions
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 of
tonnes
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.
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, the other industries stood
just
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at just
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 above 2
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millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
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. It
then
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 dropped dramatically over the years until it reached a minimum
around
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of around
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 1.3
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millions
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million
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tonnes
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, millions, tonnes, sectors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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