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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#minutes #topic #function #music #people #stress
It was in fabric and it was
such
 a big fabric The owner of
this
 fabric was my father and when I started working I was 13 years old ,and I thought It would be easy like falling a log for me but I was so much mistaken It was my first work when I got my first own money In order to earn money I worked from 6pm to 6am it was hell for my body Xd) But it was a good experience for a child like me About a process in the beginning, the fruits are harvested on the farm, where they underwent a full course of cleaning, from washing to processing as I said, it all started with washing the fruit,
this
 washing device looked like a device at customs, and
then
 it was sent for processing, it was a device of a huge size more than
truck
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a truck
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 and it had a name cherry vision 2
then
 everything was sent for sorting and put into boxes and sent to a large refrigerator,
then
furra
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Furra
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 came and delivered it all to the destination
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