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The percentage of time that Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013

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The given line chart illustrates the proportion of
time
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 that Australian parents set aside
time
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 for their
children
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 in 2013 in four activities, namely dressing,
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, playing
games
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, and preparing for bed.
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,
mothers
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 spent more
time
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 on their sons and daughters than fathers. Dressing and
homework
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 were two activities that
children
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were
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shared mostly
by
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with
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 their mommies
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 their daddies helped them more in playing
games
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 and preparing for bed. Standing at 50%, the percentage of
time
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 that parents helped their
children
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 with dressing and preparing for bed was the same. Meanwhile, the rate of
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 that fathers prepared for bed with their
children
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 was four
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,
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 double
as
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that in dressing. The proportion of
time
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 that
mothers
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 helped their offspring with dressing was the highest,
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 at 75%. In terms of
homework
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 and playing
games
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, the amount of
time
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 that both
mothers
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 and fathers shared with their
children
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 in
homework
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 was over
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half of that in playing
games
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, at 38% and 70% respectively. The rate of
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 that
mothers
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 allocated to their
children
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in
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to
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homework
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was
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 60%, which was over twice as much as that in playing
games
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, at only 25%.
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, the opposite was true for
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mothers’s
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 counterparts.

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