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These days, mobile phone and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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nowadays, It’s
conversial
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controversial
conversion
 whether the
cell
 phone
along with
 the
internet
 availability
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 more benefits than demerits,
this
 essay will examine the reason why
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 believe that the advantages of
this
 present phenomenon outweigh its disadvantages, On one hand, undisputedly,
cell
 phones equipped with
internet
 access have facilitated the daily life for
human
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 being,
moreover
, it saves an enormous amount of time which can be utilized in various fruitful communications platforms,
in other words
, people can reach other or even exchange data in no time, thanks to the new emerging platforms of networking like Instagram, Facebook,
On the other hand
, the
internet
 and
cell
 phones could be a harmful
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 to users
due to
 some malpractices
such
 as browsing without any purpose or scrolling up and down on social media
aimelessy
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aimlessly
,
as a result
 of
this
 act, people will get used to not communicating face to face to people in front which raises a generation of
socially
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 isolated community,
as well as
 the shortage of social skills in the long run, After looking at the points outlined above, undoubtedly,
cell
 phones
besides
Internet
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the Internet
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 certainly have some drawbacks in the long term if the users ignore the right method to adopt it, yet, I believe deeply that the advantages are
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compared
campared
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compared
 to its advantages as already mentioned in the essay,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instantaneous
  • digital communication
  • geographical barriers
  • social networking
  • face-to-face interactions
  • overdependence
  • privacy concerns
  • cyberbullying
  • online communities
  • unparalleled access
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