Nowadays, some children spend hours every day on their telephones. To be honest, more and more children expend their point each day on gadgets.

Nowadays, some
children
spend hours every day on their telephones. To be honest, more and more
children
expend their
point
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each day on gadgets.
This
essay agrees that
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higher rate of information in the world,
children
waste a lot of time
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smartphones.
Firstly
,
this
essay will discuss the fact youngsters how
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their time and
secondly
, discuss how to reduce
this
condition in the future.
Children
play online games.
Moreover
, they use social media.
For example
, they use Instagram and TikTok. These programs take more time. And enjoy oneself
game
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name
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of
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PUBG MOBILE.
This
game
is very dangerous
,
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because I played
this
game
and I won 100$ from PUBG. But after that, it took 200$ from me. I do not recommend
to play
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this
game
for youngsters. I think
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we can
to
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reduce
this
situation.
Firstly
, parents should give their
children
fewer phones, because
then
youngsters may
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to
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do homework or they may
to
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study.
Secondly
, guardians should supervise. I suppose
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everything depends on the parents
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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