People today often use the internet to learn about the culture of other countries. This means that it is not that important to travel to those countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the internet makes it possible to learn about other cultures from home. In some sense,
this
suggests that traveling
to those countries Change the spelling
travelling
are
not very important anymore. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
However
, I completely disagree with such
an idea because it is hard to interact with new places and societies remotely,
and because online browsing can be seen more as a part of an upcoming Remove the comma
apply
travel
.
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journey
trip
Firstly
, it is still near to impossible to interact with physical surrounding
and most Fix the agreement mistake
surroundings
of
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locals
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the locals
while
a person is staring at screen
. Maybe, the Add an article
a screen
the screen
further
advancement of virtual reality and humanoid robots will make it more realistic, but, for now, there are no ways for touching items on video streaming services. For example
, some vloggers ask subscribers to lead them through a video, but, despite of
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such
control
a viewer cannot feel smells or wind in the same way as people in that location.
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,control
Secondly
, online browsing can build expectations about an
another country, but it will not give experience from the first person view. Usually, consuming more information develops Remove the article
apply
higher
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a higher
appethite
for new discoveries in person. It helps to build a plan of budgeting and places to visit. Correct your spelling
appetite
For example
, it is almost a rule for experienced travellers to read tripadvisor.com and watch the most popular reviews on youtube.com before going to a location.
To conclude
, the internet cannot replace physical presence for learning other
countries because the level of possible interactions is completely different and Change preposition
about other
aquiring
information about a new culture on websites stimulates an actual journey. Technologies are not developed that much to outplace Correct your spelling
acquiring
the
regular tourism.Correct article usage
apply
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