People today often use the internet to learn about the culture of other countries. This means that it is not that important to travel to those countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the internet makes it possible to learn about other cultures from home. In some sense,
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to those countries
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not very important anymore.
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, I completely disagree with
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an idea because it is hard to interact with new places and societies remotely
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and because online browsing can be seen more as a part of an upcoming
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journey
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.
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, it is still near to impossible to interact with physical
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and most
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locals
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the locals
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a person is staring at
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. Maybe, the
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advancement of virtual reality and humanoid robots will make it more realistic, but, for now, there are no ways for touching items on video streaming services.
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, some vloggers ask subscribers to lead them through a video, but, despite
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control
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a viewer cannot feel smells or wind in the same way as people in that location.
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, online browsing can build expectations about
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another country, but it will not give experience from the first person view. Usually, consuming more information develops
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appethite
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appetite
for new discoveries in person. It helps to build a plan of budgeting and places to visit.
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, it is almost a rule for experienced travellers to read tripadvisor.com and watch the most popular reviews on youtube.com before going to a location.
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, the internet cannot replace physical presence for learning
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countries because the level of possible interactions is completely different and
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acquiring
information about a new culture on websites stimulates an actual journey. Technologies are not developed that much to outplace
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regular tourism.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural immersion
  • virtual tours
  • biases
  • authenticity
  • cuisine
  • perpetuate
  • sustainable tourism
  • misinterpretations
  • personal relationships
  • language acquisition
  • social media platforms
  • information accessibility
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