The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009
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The pie chart provides data on how
Germany
and
France
produce
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electricity
from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. as an initial overview,
Germany
was heavily dependent on conventional thermal in generating
electricity
. Almost all of the
electricity
in
France
was generated by nuclear power. both
Germany
and
France
generate a small amount of
electricity
from renewables. Looking into my details, almost 60% of
electricity
in
Germany
is produced by conventional thermal,Only 23% is by nuclear, leaving 17% to be generated by renewable energy Which was
further
divided into 39% generated by Biomass and approximately 37% by the wind.
France
on the other hand
, generates almost 76% of its
electricity
by nuclear and only 10% by conventional thermal Which is the opposite trend of
Germany
. renewable energy produced around 14% of
France
's
electricity
80% of
that is
done by hydroelectricity. Wint and Biomass generate 10% and 8.1% of
France
's
electricity
respectively
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