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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they shiuld only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Today it is believed that
students
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 ought to be taught their enjoyable and preferable
subjects
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 in all universities or colleges.
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, some people consider that
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teachers
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 should only teach essential
subjects
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 that will be helpful in the
future
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, namely depending on
science
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 and
technology
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. In my opinion, there are several advantages and disadvantages
of
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 these views and I will give some personal
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opinions
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 with reasons and examples in my essay.
Although
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 some people think that
all
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in all
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 educational places
students
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 should learn whatever they do not want ,
such
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 as
science
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 or
technology
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, I consider that every
student
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's interests are considered
to
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the
subjects
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 by the educational system. If
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student
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a student
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want
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 to learn one
subject
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, he or she will try to learn the essential degree of
this
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subject
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 and
also
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student
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the student
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 can all difficulties of
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subject
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the subject
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 in the studying time.
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result
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this
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 types of
students
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 achieve a lot of rewards in the
future
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 life.
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, I recommend that having
interest
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an interest
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 in
subjects
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 not only
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improves
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child's
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a child's
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 new abilities or horizons to the world
,
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but
also
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open
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 new ideas for their
subject
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. That's
mean
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 that they do enjoy their studying.
On the other hand
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, now there are several important
subjects
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,
for
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instance
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technology
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 and
science
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 which are connected with life.
Therefore
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, some suggested that
technology
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 and
science
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 should be allowed to study every
student
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 in all universities. In my opinion, it is
wrong
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the wrong
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view
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to
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of
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educational
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the educational
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 system. Because many youngsters have not
encouraging
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encouraged
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 or
interests
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interested
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to
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in
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 their university in order to compulsory
subjects
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. If they do not prefer learning
to
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apply
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science
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 or
technology
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, they maybe go to
the
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apply
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university by the way.
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result
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 they cannot a good job or necessary career in the
future
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. In conclusion, some suggested that
the
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apply
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students
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 of all educational places should study whatever they
do
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apply
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want. Others think that
students
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 ought to be learned
subjects
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 that
necessary
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are necessary
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 in
the
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their
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future
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 life which
related
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are related
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 to
science
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 or
technology
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.
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