The table below give information about sales of fairtrade labelled coffee bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

The table below give information about sales of fairtrade labelled coffee  bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries
The given tables show how much money
taken
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was taken
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from
sales
of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
and
bananas
in
UK
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the UK
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,
Switzerland
, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden. The units are measured in millions of euros for
5-year
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a 5-year
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period from 1999.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
sales
of
coffee
in all 4
Europian
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European
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countries increased steadily.
However
,
coffee's
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coffee
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sales
in
UK
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the UK
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raised
drammatically
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dramatically
over the period shown.
Furthermore
,
bananas'
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bananas
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sales
for
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in
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Switzerland
,
UK
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the UK
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and Belgium saw an increase. When it comes to Sweden and Denmark,
this
indication decreased sharply. Between 1999 and 2004, the
sales
of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
for
Switzerland
doubled from 3
million
to 6
million
euros.
This
figure for Denmark
also
grew
starting
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from 1.8 to 2
million
euros.
Coffee
sales
in the
UK
saw a
drammatic
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dramatic
increase from 1.5
till
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to
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20
million
with
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apply
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taking the first position in
this
group. There was a sharp
grow
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in
sales
of
bananas
in
Switzerland
from 15
million
to 47
millions
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million
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from 1999 until the
last
year. People in
Switzerland
spent
on
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the on
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bananas
most in the group in both years.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, uk, switzerland, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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