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The table below give information about sales of fairtrade labelled coffee bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

The table below give information about sales of fairtrade labelled coffee bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries
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The given tables show how much money
taken
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was taken
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 from
sales
 of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
 and
bananas
 in
UK
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the UK
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,
Switzerland
, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden. The units are measured in millions of euros for
5-year
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a 5-year
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 period from 1999.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
sales
 of
coffee
 in all 4
Europian
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European
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 countries increased steadily.
However
,
coffee's
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coffee
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sales
 in
UK
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the UK
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 raised
drammatically
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dramatically
 over the period shown.
Furthermore
,
bananas'
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bananas
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sales
for
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in
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Switzerland
,
UK
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the UK
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 and Belgium saw an increase. When it comes to Sweden and Denmark,
this
 indication decreased sharply. Between 1999 and 2004, the
sales
 of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
 for
Switzerland
 doubled from 3
million
 to 6
million
 euros.
This
 figure for Denmark
also
 grew
starting
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 from 1.8 to 2
million
 euros.
Coffee
sales
 in the
UK
 saw a
drammatic
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dramatic
 increase from 1.5
till
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to
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 20
million
with
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apply
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taking the first position in
this
 group. There was a sharp
grow
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 in
sales
 of
bananas
 in
Switzerland
 from 15
million
 to 47
millions
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million
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 from 1999 until the
last
 year. People in
Switzerland
 spent
on
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the on
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bananas
 most in the group in both years.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, uk, switzerland, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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