The table below shows information and prediction regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and prediction regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
The table illustrates the proportion of the
population
more than the age of sixty-five for three years i.e., 1988, 2000 and 2030 in three nations namely Canada, Germany and UK. Here we can observe the value is highest for Germany in all three years.
Initially
,
this
category constituted twenty per
cent
of the total
population
,
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and hiked by five per
cent
in 2000. By 2030, it became thirty per
cent
.
However
, the rise is minimum for the UK. In 1988 only fourteen per
cent
of the total
population
was aged 65 and above. By 2000 it rose by only fifteen per
cent
, and in 2030 it constituted one-fifth of the total mass. Canada maintained approximately the same growth over these years. In 2000 it was 21 per
cent
, which is 5 per
cent
more than that in 1988, and by 2030 same percentage of growth is visible and it stands with 26 per
cent
of the total
population
belonging to the age group of sixty-five and more.
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