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Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately.

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Nowadays , a group of
students
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 with bad behaviour in
school
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 is one of the major problems for teachers. They would possibly
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contribute to
a bad image of the
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 and influence others.
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 are necessary to undergo counselling and the
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's disciplinary action.
Students
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 don't have the same attitude and there are factors that lead them to change their behaviours. Some of their personality got from the families where they grew up and some are just influenced by the
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 around them.
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, a student who has been experienced a broken family had a big effect on his/her attitude,
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 student would possibly disrespectful to
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 and felt insecure. These instances could influence other
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 who have
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 experienced family problems. Through the help of counselling and disciplinary action, the number of disruptive
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students
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 has gradually decreased. Part of the deped policies to every
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applied by the
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 head and teachers to prevent unwanted happenings.
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,
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 must be fairly taught and informed of what are the right behaviours that they must show to the
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 around them by implementing seminars and conferences.
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 essay argued that separating
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 from others could not help a lot because
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students
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 have their own way to express their personality and behaviour and not all the
students
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 who are noisy and disobedient are disruptive,it might be because of anger or feelings, they just need some advice to the
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. In my opinion,
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 should not be separated when taught to make them realize that teachers and
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 faculty are concerned about them despite their behaviours.

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