The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.

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The chart displays statistics regarding the different crimes in Newport City between the

years

2003 to 2012. The crimes shown are burglary, car theft and robbery. The general trend seems to

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fluctuations in car theft and robbery

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although

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although

, both stayed quite

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steady

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, both statistics seemed quite

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different robbery stayed

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between

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between

500 and 1000

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incidents

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incidents

per year,

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whilst

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while

, car theft stayed

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2500 incidents per year,

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burglary had a

masive

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massive

decrese

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decrease

over the

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featuring

in 2004 at over 3500 cases and

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steadily

decreasing all the way to just under 1500 cases,

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2012

however

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statistic reached its

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lowest

point in 2008 at around 1000 incidents

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lightly fluctuated over the

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in the first few

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most of them reaching their lowest point in 2008,

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, all 3 types of crime stayed around the same for the

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slight fluctuations towards the end.

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The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.

Some people feel that public money should not be spent on cultural amenities such as museums, theaters and art festivals. How important do you think these things are to society as a whole? Are there any areas which are more important for the governments to fund?

As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.

Children spend a lot of time watching TV and playing computer game, however it does not help in improving their mental abilities. Do you agree or disagree?

Some believe that all individuals who break the law should be placed in prison as a form of punishment. However, others hold the view that there are more effective alternatives to deal with lawbreakers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some individuals argue that children should always heed the advice given by their parents, while others believe that children should make decisions independently. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.