Many believe that the goal of one’s career should be to pursue a passion while others feel it is merely a way to earn a livelihood

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in his life, so it should be well
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is
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in a good way, there should be
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first,
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passion,
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needs to have your passions
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to be good at it, because if he is not good, might have many problems looking for a job and even have problems at the university with some tasks or
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.  Talking about livelihood your
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needs to be based on your future lie
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the end, it is
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wealth
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in the present and in the future, and if you want to have it you need to think about many
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like the earnings, your, lifestyle, the lifestyle that you want in the future, but in a short, middle and long term. I firmly
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a I firmly believe that the
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of choosing a career need to have a balance between your passion
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your livelihood goals, and it will depend on each
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taking into consideration all of the things that I mentioned before. But
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you a not happy with your
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you can change your career.
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