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The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories[ unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home,housework and gardening] describe the information presented below,comparing results for men and women in the categories shown.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories[ unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home,housework and gardening] describe the information presented below,comparing results for men and women in the categories shown.
The chart illustrates the average
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 that married
women
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 and married
men
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 spend on
household
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work
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 per week.
Overall
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, as can be seen from the diagram, married
men
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 tend to do less
work
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 at home than married
women
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 whether they have kids or not. It is noticeable that married couples without children can be fairer in dividing
household
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 chores with the
hours
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 of
women
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 and
men
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 doing unpaid
work
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 at home being 30
hours
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 and nearly 20
hours
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 correspondingly.
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, the
hours
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 of
household
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work
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 are unequally distributed between married
men
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 and
women
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.
According to
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 the chart,
men
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 only do closely 20
hours
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while
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 their wives do over 50
hours
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 of no-salary
work
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 at home.
Moreover
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, partners who have married with three or more children have the most unfair
household
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 chores distribution.
This
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 can be explained by the number on the chart when
women
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 have to carry the housework for up to 60
hours
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 but
men
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 still remain to do a minimal hour of 20.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, women, men, household, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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