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The chart below shows the value of one country's export in various cayegories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage changes in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's export in various cayegories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage changes in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The graph and table below compare the
amount
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 of export
goods
 from one nation with 5 types of
products
and
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divided into; petroleum
products
, Engineering
goods
, Gems and Jewellery, agricultural
products
, and textiles. In 2015 and 2016.
Overall
, it is can be observed that export earnings in both years experienced
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similar trend from the highest earning and slightly dropped in all categories.
On the other hand
, The proportion of those
products
 in the country,
textile
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the textile
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 industry
which
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was the largest growth in change values compared with others. To start with,
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Nation export's earnings from 2015 to 2016, at 60
billion
dollars
 was petroleum and followed by engineered
goods
 at 50
billion
dollars
 in 2015 and
in
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2016 maintain the same percentage at 60
billion
dollars
, and textiles represented the lowest earning solely 30
billion
dollars
, respectively. With regard to, the percentage change in values from both years, textiles showed the highest percentage at 15.24 per
cent
 and followed by engineered
goods
 at 8.5 per
cent
,
petroleum
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and petroleum
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products
 at 3 per
cent
, respectively.
On the other hand
, solely gems and jewellery experienced undergo to 5.18 per
cent
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, products, billion, dollars, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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