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The number of people who are overweight or obese is far higher than in previous generation. What are the reasons for this, and how this problem be tackled?

#people #generation
A growing number of people use their
computer
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computers
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 or
another internet-connected devices
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another internet-connected device
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 to
work
 from
home
instead
 of driving to
work
.
Although
 there are some significant advantages, there are
also
 some disadvantages, which will both be discussed below. One of the biggest benefits is that individuals do not have to spend a lot of time every day
traveling
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 to and from
work
.
This
 can take an hour or longer each trip for many people and is a big source of stress. They may save time and reduce stress by avoiding traffic congestion, which should enable them to
work
 more productively.
Additionally
, working from
home
 may provide individuals
greater
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 control over their life.
In other words
, office workers frequently have to pretend to be working when they are actually simply squandering time. They have a lot of
work
 at
home
 to do
such
 as a deadline,and it is up to them when and how they complete it.
However
, working from
home
 may be isolating. A significant drawback is not having coworkers nearby to interact with and ask for assistance if you run into an issue that can not be resolved online.
Furthermore
,
while
 working in an office can foster a collaborative environment
that is
 better for productivity and the success of the business, it is sometimes preferable to address problems face-to-face even when you have access to someone via email.
Overall
, it appears that being able to
work
 from
home
 can simplify life and provide employees
greater
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 autonomy. There are some tasks,
nevertheless
, that are better completed as a group.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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