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The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011

The chart below gives information about the household percentage of spending on essential goods in China for the years 1995 and 2011
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of the
household
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budget
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 for necessities in China during the year 1995-2011.
Overall
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, most percentages of the
budget
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 are spent on food,
while
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 less amount was spent on medicine and
household
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 goods in both years. In 1995, 68% of the
household
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budget
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 was spent on food, which was higher than the others
however
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, only 4%
budget
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 was spent on medicine. 19% of the
household
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budget
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 was spent on clothing. The
budget
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 spending on
household
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 goods is 10% less than on clothes.
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, In 2011, 11% and 1% decreases occurred in the
budget
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, which was spent on food and clothing respectively.
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, 7% and 3% increase experienced in medicine and
household
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 goods.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, budget with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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