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pie charts the amount of money that a children's charity located in US spent and received in one year.

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The two pie charts show the annual revenue a children's charity in the US generated from food donations, community contributions, other
income
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, government grants and investment
income
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 and how they spent their budget on three different categories.
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, children's charity backbone when it comes to financing was donated food accounting for 86.6% of their entire revenue produced. The next significant sector that helped the charity with money was community contributions with 10.4%.
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, program revenue contributed just 2.2% of their profit. Other
income
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, government grants and investment
income
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 were the least sources of resources with a rate not higher than 0.5% each. With regards to how they spent their budget, program services consume the highest proportion of their expenses attracting 95.5%. Fundraising was somehow important as they spent 2.5% of their resources on it. The
last
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 item they value was management and general receiving just 1.6%. In ,summary it is evident that the organization's main source of
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 was from food donations
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 investment and government grants were the least contributors. ,
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 it is clear from the second pie that the group spent the largest size of their fund on program service,
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 management and general received the lowest recognition.
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