Many people are afraid to leave their homes because of the fear of crime. Some believe that more actions should be taken to prevent crime. Others feel that little can be done. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays,

health

problems are increasingly being paid attention to by individuals.

However

, it is believed that the general

health

standard of

civilians

is likely to decrease in the years to come. From

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perspective, I partly disagree with

this

opinion because of the following reasons. Perhaps for many,

this

standpoint is convincing because of several reasons.

First,

the polluted environment will cause negative impacts on the well-being of most

civilians

in the world, particularly in polluted areas. To elaborate, an increasing amount of vehicles is one of the key reasons for air pollution that causes lung disease

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civilians

. Particularly, in developing countries

such

as Vietnam,

along with

the industrial process, there will be more factories which emit a large

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of emissions and affect negatively their well-being.

Second,

individuals tend to spend more time

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working

instead

of taking care of their physical and mental

health

because of the financial burden. To be specific, five to nine jobs likely dominate the majority of the time of employees, which leads to sedentary lifestyles in them since they lack time to

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exercise. In fact, now most current generations are facing economic burdens to own houses,

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individuals their whole life to achieve. Despite the above valid arguments, I still contend that

this

is a wrong perspective. The most pertinent point is that the development of the medical system and technology enables

civilians

to apply them in enhancing their

health

. Especially, thanks to advanced tools, doctors have researched more modern methods

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finding out effective cues to help patients.

For example

, American residents apply many technology tools to manage their

health

such

as Healthy apps

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smartphones. Another justification is that the quality of life increasingly grows, which leads to the improvement of the well-being of people in the future.

For instance

, Vietnamese

civilians

tend to pursue a healthy diet by consuming more vegetables

instead

of fried foods

as well as

going to the hospital to check their

health

annually. In short, the basic

health

standard of people may be lower in the long run than the present because of the polluted environment and financial pressure.

However

, these problems are handled completely thanks to the growth of society.