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Some people believe that one of the best ways to solve environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that it is possible to resolve a part of environmental problems if the
cost
 of
fuel
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personal and commercial transport will significantly
increase
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. I particularly agree with
this
 statement and in
this
 essay, I will try to explain why. On the one hand, burnable
fuel
it
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is the main resource of energy in
modern
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 world, and the
cost
 of the
fuel
 has a great impact
for
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 the
cost
 of food and goods,
hence
 people try to save
their
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money
what
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 extend to conscious consumption of the
fuel
 and more effective logistic ways.
Therefore
,
the
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fuel
 economy is decreased amount of the pollution
to
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 the environment which has a positive influence on
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nature.
Moreover
,
cost
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 of
fuel
 extends to
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the developing
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developing
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 of advanced technology and it is a fact that modern cars have
a
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less exhaust
of
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carbon dioxide into the atmosphere than earlier.
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, Scandinavian countries stimulate people to keep the
fuel
 economy policy and to have modern vehicles by way
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 cancellation of taxes
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 the owners of cars with zero emissions.
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, increasing the
cost
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fuel
 in poor countries
,
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 could stimulate people to use mo cheaper and dirtier
fuel
, which only increases air pollution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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