The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

The
world’
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population
has been growing lately and
this
has been seen as the greatest
problem
faced by society. Our planet has provided enough resources for
human’s
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survival, enabling the rise of
population
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so far,
however
, some
people
don´t know how to properly use these resources.
This
essay will explain why selfishness is the greatest
problem
faced by humanity in my opinion. It is possible to say that everything
people
need to survive, at
certain
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point, comes from the
environment
, and
this
has been allowing the development of modern society. The world’s landscape has changed a lot, especially after the Industrial Revolution, when many forests were destroyed and replaced by industries and plantations to supply
people
’s demand for food and goods. The more the
population
grows, the more the
environment
is damaged. By comparing the percentage of green areas in Europe between 100 years ago and today, the result would certainly indicate that almost no green areas have left today.
In other words
, the consumption of resources has been allowing
the
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population
growth,
however
,
this
upward trend has been damaging the
environment
too. Even though the continued rise of
world’s
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population
could be considered
the
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humanity’s greatest
problem
, it is not. The greatest
problem
is
all
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the terrible impact that
population’s
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population
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growth brings to the
environment
, caused by
people
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selfishness. Usually, big companies are not worried if building an industry in the middle of a jungle,
for example
, will lead to deforestation, destroy the habitat of different species, or even pollute rivers with waste. They are only concerned about producing more with less money, so even knowing that the industrial activity will most likely damage the
environment
, big companies will continue to do so because it is profitable for them. Because
people
don´t think about future consequences and prefer to destroy the
environment
in order to thrive economically, I believe that selfishness is the greatest
problem
in society today.
To sum up
, if
people
are not willing to see the big picture of what humanity’s greatest
problem
is, they would say that it is the continued rise of
world’s
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population
.
This
essay explained why and at what cost the
population
has been growing lately, leading to the conclusion that humanity’s greatest
problem
is the selfish
behavior
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against
the
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environment
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conservation and not the
population
growth itself.
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