Some people think that government should ban dangerous sports, such as sky diving and rock climbing.Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, people are more interested in dangerous
sports
which
have Correct word choice
and
variety
of thought that should the government need to Add an article
a variety
ban
it
or not. Correct pronoun usage
them
However
, in every sports
have Change to a singular noun
sport
danger
side in itself so that
if we set the rules well enough to protect the Correct word choice
apply
one
who Correct pronoun usage
ones
play
dangerous Change the verb form
plays
sports
it is much better than ban
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banning
it
away. In my opinion, I Correct pronoun usage
them
am totally disagree
to Change the verb form
totally disagree
ban
any risky sports
and I will elaborate my
point of view below.
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on my
To begin
with, there are various of
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apply
sports
thatare
dangerous so if the government create Correct your spelling
that are
the
rules to support Correct article usage
apply
that
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those
sports
well will be able to protect the dangerous and risky from
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apply
the
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apply
sports
. Sports
itself has the
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a
danger
side in most of them so Replace the word
dangerous
that
if the Correct word choice
apply
gorvernment
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government
have
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has
a
proper rules or regulations that will make Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
that
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apply
sports
become more safe
to play or able Replace the words
safer
the
protect the person who played Correct article usage
apply
it
. Correct pronoun usage
them
This
will be a better ways
than just Correct the article-noun agreement
way
ban
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banning
the
dangerous Correct article usage
apply
sports
. For instance
, American football have
the rule that player need to wear helmet or Change the verb form
has
body guard
to protect themselves from Correct your spelling
bodyguard
teckel
in the game.
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tackle
Furthermore
, it is better to make dangerous
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it dangerous
from
are limited persons to play it. Some of the dangerous Change preposition
for
sports
are very danger
to let any Replace the word
dangerous
persons
able to play Fix the agreement mistake
person
it
so Correct pronoun usage
apply
that
if we could set the age limit or consent form to play the Correct word choice
apply
sports
might able to decreased
certain Wrong verb form
decrease
risk
from playing that Fix the agreement mistake
risks
sports
.
For example
, sky driving
, Correct your spelling
diving
if
we set a strong regulation that one who Correct word choice
apply
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wants
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wants
want
to play Correct subject-verb agreement
wants
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has
have
to age over 21 and Correct subject-verb agreement
has
need
to sign a consent form before playing the Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
sports
. It might be the way Fix the agreement mistake
sport
reduce
a person Fix the infinitive
to reduce
to play
it and might able to Change the verb form
plays
decreased
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decrease
a
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apply
danger
from it because people who want to play are
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apply
neded
to know that Correct your spelling
needed
need
themself
are Correct pronoun usage
they
readdy
for the sport.
In conclusion, in Correct your spelling
ready
todays
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today's
world
people have Add a comma
,world
interest
in Correct article usage
an interest
such
dangerous sports
even very young kids that have saw
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seen
sawed
the
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apply
sports
from
movies. Change preposition
in
However
, if the government organise the
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apply
sports
well enough by
the reasons above the Change preposition
for
dangerous
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dangers
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of
the
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sports
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