The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year of 2009
The given bar graph illustrates the spending of
American
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Americans
Canadian
, English, and Japanese Fix the agreement mistake
Canadians
on
five main categories, which is reported in 2009.
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in
In
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At
the
first glance, it is noticeable that the citizens in Correct article usage
apply
four
countries had a tendency to spend Correct article usage
the four
on
accommodationCorrect quantifier usage
more on
most
, Correct quantifier usage
apply
whereas
the expenditure
on health care was on the contrary
, instead
of the United States, where clothing was the least. In addition
, while
the expenditure
of
food, housing, Change preposition
on
transportation
was recorded with a high rate, that of health care and clothing were lower among Correct word choice
and transportation
five
given classifications.
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the five
Firstly
, in the high-spending group, the figure for housing was about 23% on average, being the category most expended, while
that for food and transportation was approximately 17% and 15%, respectively. Furthermore
, United States, Canada
, and United Kingdom citizens spent most on housing; Replace the word
Canadian
by contrast
, Japan prioritized spending on culinary that
hit the point of 23%, outwarding other nations.
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which
Additionally
, the US, Canada, the UK, and Japan had similar expenditure
on clothing, which was 5% on average. Fix the agreement mistake
expenditures
However
, there was a notable difference in expenditure
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the expenditure
of
health care, which the figure for the United States was about 6%, doubled that for Canada and Japan, Change preposition
on
while
tripled that for the United Kingdom.Submitted by namle.ivce on
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