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Most people believe that the model of the EU is the future, with countries gradually joining together into larger units.

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The
model
 of Europe is to join together into larger units. The
countries
 that joined the
model
 will have more advantages than the others.
To begin
 with, when the
country
 joins the
model
 of Europe the taxes will be lowered and the prices associated with a free trade area. The people will have lower bills for electricity, water and food, which is a major advantage for families with low income.
Secondly
, when one
country
 is in the
model
 of Europe the travel between
countries
 to live and work is a lot better. The border with the
countries
 is a waste of time because there is always a traffic jam. The traffic jam creates an ecological problem because of the
exhausted
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 fumes that come from the cars. The ability to travel freely for work is an advantage
,
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 because you can work from another
country
.
Lastly
, when two or more
countries
 join together they modernise easily
,
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 because there are more ideas on how to improve. The influence between
countries
 is a benefit for both of them. In my opinion, the EU
model
 is a major advantage for
countries
 which are joined, because there is no border between them. Lower taxes can help people with low incomes.
The modernisation
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 will lead the
country
 to gain popularity and more people to live there.
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