Being involved in the arts makes people feel better. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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trendmous
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tremendous
talent in people and
someindividuals
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some individuals
believe that learning
arts
may change
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person
much better than before. I strongly agree
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this
statement that
arts
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behaviour and mood.In
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the former statement with suitable examples.
To begin
with, the main reasons for learning
art
.
Firstly
,
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acquiring
art
as
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habit in
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daily life may change
the
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person
's ability and helps to change their mood,their thinking power and
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of understanding.
Secondly
,
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arts
can changes
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mental behaviour and helps to get recovered from some of the trauma conditions. To illustrate,Scientists
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conducted
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survey in the medical camps for checking the cancer patients, they found that patients who were interested in drawing ,
painting
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are more active than the other patients.
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it is
an
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prerequestie
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prerequisite
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human beings.
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,
art
also
makes the individual
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along with
their specific talents in order to explore the world.
Arts
like drawing,
painting
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and painting
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shows the inner feelings of
the
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particular
person
by
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stitching
an
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person
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face or nature drawings.
For instance
,children learn how to draw
in
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school age and later their interests take them to
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level in performing their own talents and get
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successful
in
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their career
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career
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.
To sum up
,
arts
changes
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the
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person
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behaviour,
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and spiritually
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spiritually
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and help to explore their talents
to
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the globe.I would like to reiterate that
art
is an
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essential
element for the development of a
person
.
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