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Band 5.5

Being involved in the arts makes people feel better. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
art
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trendmous
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tremendous
 talent in people and
someindividuals
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some individuals
 believe that learning
arts
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 may change
the
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person
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 much better than before. I strongly agree
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this
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 statement that
arts
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changes
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a person
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person
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 behaviour and mood.In
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 essay ,
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 paragraphs will be explained
about
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the former statement with suitable examples.
To begin
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 with, the main reasons for learning
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 .
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,
acquring
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acquiring
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 habit in
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daily life may change
the
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person
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's ability and helps to change their mood,their thinking power and
way
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 of understanding.
Secondly
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,
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arts
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 can changes
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person's
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 mental behaviour and helps to get recovered from some of the trauma conditions. To illustrate,Scientists
had
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conducted
an
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 survey in the medical camps for checking the cancer patients, they found that patients who were interested in drawing ,
painting
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and painting
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 are more active than the other patients.
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Finally
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 it is
an
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prerequestie
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prerequisite
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human beings.
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 ,
art
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also
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 makes the individual
happiness
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along with
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 their specific talents in order to explore the world.
Arts
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 like drawing,
painting
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and painting
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 shows the inner feelings of
the
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 particular
person
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 by
stiching
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stitching
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person
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 face or nature drawings.
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,children learn how to draw
in
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school age and later their interests take them to
higher
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 level in performing their own talents and get
succesfull
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successful
 in
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their career
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career
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careers
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.
To sum up
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,
arts
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changes
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the
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person
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 behaviour,
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and spiritually
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spiritually
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 and help to explore their talents
to
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around
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 the globe.I would like to reiterate that
art
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 is an
essentail
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essential
 element for the development of a
person
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.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artistic activities
  • Mental health
  • Emotional well-being
  • Sense of community
  • Self-expression
  • Creativity
  • Self-esteem
  • Personal growth
  • Art therapy
  • Emotional release
  • Communication
  • Subjective impact
  • Stress reduction
  • Relaxation
  • Outlet for emotions
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