The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart below compares the Australian participants who participate in physical activity
by
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apply
according to
six age
categories in the year 2010.
Overall
, it was apparent that women who have age
more than 25 tended to prefer doing physical Correct article usage
an age
activitiy
rather than men. Reversely, Correct your spelling
activity
activities
however
, the opposite was true for men under 24.
In the
youngest male(15 to 24) presented Change preposition
The
the
huge amount of ratio, which was 52.8%. Correct article usage
a
However
, the male's
tendency experienced a decrease between Change noun form
male
age
25 to 34 and 35 to 44, which was 42.2% and 39.5% respectively. After reduction, the data showed a slight Fix the agreement mistake
ages
increasing
from Replace the word
increase
moddle-aged
adults to old-aged adults male.
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middle-aged
module-aged
On the other hand
, 47.7% of young female
around 15-24 were involved in Fix the agreement mistake
females
exercise
, Add an article
the exercise
an exercise
whereas
it increased gradually to reach the peak between 45
to 54 Correct article usage
the 45
age
group. It remained stable during the next group and reached a low of 47.1% at 65 and over.Submitted by Jeyul on
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