with the pressures on today's young people to Succeed academically. Some people believe that non-academic subjects at school eg. physical education and cookery should be removed from the syllabus so that chicken can concentrate wholly on acadesoic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Undoubtedly, one cannot negate the fact that the topic of
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, I opine that physical education and cookery both
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as both
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can be taught as
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in school so I do not agree with
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the Zenith of my thinking pyramid is that in school
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have a lot of things to learn & depending upon the country they live in, they may have to learn. up to 3 languages,
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geography and all
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, sports and other non, academic
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help
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children
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to stay active and refresh their minds. It can be lucidly observed that recreational activities can help
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increase their imagination power and develop their motor skills.
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their main
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because
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will lead to their
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path and fulfil their future need, what they really
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. To some extent, Sports and Cookery will
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, if students want
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, Sachin Tendulkar, who is an Indian successful cricketer,
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has only completed their schooling but still he has Successful
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, who is. an Indian celebrity chef, who has achieved success. In the field of cooking.
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both academic and non-academic
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because
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also
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lead to
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