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The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two tables inform the
number
 of
exchange
students
 from universities across the nation in
Europe
 to
Australia
 for two different years, 2007 and 2009.
Overall
, it can be seen from the data that transfer
student
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students
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 from universities in
Europe
 to
Australia
 increased significantly from 2007 to 2009. The
students
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number of students
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 who went for
exchange
 from
Europe
 to
Australia
 increased from 189 in 2007 to 226 in 2009.
In contrast
, the
student
 who came from
Australia
 to
Europe
 countries stagnant with the same figure of 152 in 2007 and 2009. French has the highest
exchange
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student
 from
Australia
 and
likewise
, had 61
students
 who went abroad to
Australia
while
 it was 37
students
 came to France in 2007. In 2009, the
number
 of a French
student
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students
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 who went to
Australia
 changed to only 60
students
in contrast
 to the total of
Australian
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Australians
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 that came to France which uplifted to 58
students
. Some countries encountered decreased, stagnant hiked changes in the
exchange
student
number
 who went to and came from
Australia
. The Netherlands was the country which had a major downturn
number
 of
student
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students
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 from
Australia
 from 32 in 2007 to 18 in 2009.
Then
, the
student
number
 from German to
Australia
 was significantly lifted from 27 in 2007 to 62 in 2009.
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