In some countries, some criminal trials are shown on the television andthe general public can watch them, do you think the advantages of thisoutweigh the disadvantages?

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criminal processes on
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our countries suffering from robbers , terrorists and so on . So when their criminal
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robbery.
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remember one story about
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a man
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who
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imprisonment
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robbery of country
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criminal
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bad
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. Now television is very famous
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children .So I think that if youngsters
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process . It can be harmful
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important to
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wellbeing
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