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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 per
person
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 in the United
Kingdom
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,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Overall
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, the United
Kingdom
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 keeps the highest
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 of those four countries. It was about 11 metric tons per
person
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 from 1967 to 1977.
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 the
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 per
person
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 during the next 30
years
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 were kept going down to approximately 9 metric
tonnes
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 at a slow speed, the United
Kingdom
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 was still the country that have the highest CO2
emissions
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 per
person
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  Once
Sweden
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 had the second highest
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 but after 50
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 it was down to the third one with Portugal and Italy taking second place.
Sweden
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, once its CO2
emissions
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 just had about 1 metric tonne lower than the United
Kingdom
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, but after 1977,
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 CO2
emissions
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 per
person
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 of
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 country kept decreasing. When in 2007, it only have approximately 5 metric
tonnes
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 per
person
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. In Italy, the data on the
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dioxide
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 emission per
person
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 kept increasing every year. In the first ten
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, its climbs to 6 CO2
emissions
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 in metric
tonnes
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. And after the next 20
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, it grew very slowly and the data was as some as
Sweden
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 in 1987. The data for Portugal kept rising rapidly, it grew to 3 metric
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person
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 when the time came
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1987. After remaining the growth of
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dioxide
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emissions
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 per
person
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 every year without any decrease sign, Portugal
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 has the same
dioxide
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emissions
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 as
Sweden
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.
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