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Some people think that governments should provide more money on faster means of public transport, while others think that they should pay attention to more important priorities such as spending money and the environment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are
great
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 number of
government’s
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government
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 accountabilities for
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. Some people claim that investing funds
on
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 rapid public transportation could be one of the fundamental aspects of its duty to deal with.
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, others argue that they should focus on more desperate parts in need for
society
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. On the one hand, providing more money
on
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 rapid
transport
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 has a significant benefit for the citizens.
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, faster public
transport
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 facilitates them to save their commuting time
especially
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 during rush.
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,
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 current
transport
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 systems are well established in most
of
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urban areas,
it
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 still
needs
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 to be developed outskirts of cities
in particular
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. Despite
densely
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 populated
in
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these areas interval time between metropolitan buses is
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more
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infrequent than its demands. It ultimately causes a severe shortage of transportation for them.
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, rapid public
transport
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 enables the residents to reach their destinations without any delays.
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, it could be considered
as
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a feasible incentive to
promote
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 people
using
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 more public
transports
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transport
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 rather than driving their own vehicles.
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, there are more urgent issues to be resolved
such
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 as
,
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unemployment rates. Since undergoing
economic
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 crisis for several years, it has left negative effects on job markets too.
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, many corporations and local businesses have quickly cooled off their desire
for recruiting
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 in the unstable economic situation. To tackle
this
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 issue,
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government should take
an
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appropriate action in terms of financial support for unemployed citizens. As they
representative
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represent
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 one of
vulnerable
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the vulnerable
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 social groups in
society
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, increasing the level of subsidy for vocational education services could be mutually profitable for both prospective employers and employees in the long-term perspective. In conclusion,
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nevertheless
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 there is a remarkable benefit from funding
on
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for
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rapid means of public
transport
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, I firmly insist that government should place a great weight on more important priorities in
society
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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