Nowadays, international tourism in the biggest industry in the world. unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays a wide range of
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love travelling worldwide,
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, personally from my point of view, I disagree with that, international
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did not create any tension,
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, I feel
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way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay. I firmly believe that international
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has positive effects on any
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,
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,
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creates a good feeling inside
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, living in
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country
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that
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comes in,
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, there is no bad feeling between habitats and
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, I know a lot of British
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travel to Marrakech, Morroco,those tourists bringing a lot of knowledge and cultures,
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, leading the economics system recycled well on a positive way,
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, there is no tension.
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, others agree with that by saying international
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creates tension,
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, some international
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don't respect the
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to which they want to travel,
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, creates a bad feeling about other religions ,
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, they don't respect
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they live in
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country
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where the
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come,
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,
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year I see some
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throwing rubbish into the street without any respect for the habitants and nature, that's can create tensions between
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from different cultures, in conclusion ,
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personally
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I believe that international
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has positive effects worldwide,
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, helping
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for understanding new cultures with suitable languages,
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the important part is the economic system recycled well, I strongly believe that supports my point of view.

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