Nowadays, international tourism in the biggest industry in the world. unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays a wide range of
people
love travelling worldwide,
hence
, personally from my point of view, I disagree with that, international
tourism
did not create any tension,
therefore
, I feel
this
way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay. I firmly believe that international
tourism
has positive effects on any
country
,
therefore
,
tourism
creates a good feeling inside
people
, living in
this
country
that
tourism
comes in,
secondly
, there is no bad feeling between habitats and
tourism
,
for instance
, I know a lot of British
People
travel to Marrakech, Morroco,those tourists bringing a lot of knowledge and cultures,
also
, leading the economics system recycled well on a positive way,
nevertheless
, there is no tension.
as a consequence
, others agree with that by saying international
tourism
creates tension,
moreover
, some international
tourism
don't respect the
country
to which they want to travel,
also
, creates a bad feeling about other religions ,
in addition
, they don't respect
people
they live in
this
country
where the
tourism
come,
for example
,
last
year I see some
tourism
throwing rubbish into the street without any respect for the habitants and nature, that's can create tensions between
people
from different cultures, in conclusion ,
,
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I believe that international
tourism
has positive effects worldwide,
therefore
, helping
people
for understanding new cultures with suitable languages,
whereas
the important part is the economic system recycled well, I strongly believe that supports my point of view.
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