The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.

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These maps illustrate the development of the town of Tynemouth from 1995 and now. It is clear from the graph that residential construction has increased with apartments and more houses.

According to

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what is shown, the eastern side had some changes during

this

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period. The forest park has been replaced with built a tennis zone, just below that

besides

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the hotel we can see a car park has been created, and the farmland which is adjacent to the forest park in 1995 had turned into a golf site.

However

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, the western part

also

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had developed, and the houses across the

road

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had extended with one house on each side of the

road

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Also

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, the bypass

road

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had expanded

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and built two residences on the opposite side beside a household's block.

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, the shop store located across the second

road

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turned into a restaurant and

also

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replaced the fish market with an apartment, the sea as it represented the fishing port had been demolished.

To sum up

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, we could say that many changes to places in the village, the hotel and cafe sites remained untouched.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

184 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Urban development
Infrastructure
Residential area
Commercial district
Public amenities
Greenery
Renovation
Expansion
Demolition
Construction
Accessibility
Public transport
Urbanization
Evolution
Gentrification

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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that to learn about other countries, they need to travel. Some say that it is not necessary to travel; we can have information through TV and the Internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people say free time activities for children should be organized by parents. Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time.

The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich are becoming richer. and the poor are even getting poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap?

You recently stayed at a hotel conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include • Where you stayed • What the problems were • How they can fix your complaint.