Some people think books are lossing their importance in information and entertainment purposes.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In
this
modern era, there is no doubt that electrical devices like
laptops
, computers and smartphones are replacing
books
. I
am
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partialy
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partially
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agree and disagree with
this
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essay
. I will explain my views in upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
,
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societies
are more
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the
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automoblie
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automobile
devices.
People
are using
laptops
in their daily life.
For example
, in schools,
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and
at
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it
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. The reason is that
,
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they are thinking it is easy to carry and space
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consumable
.
According to
one survey, which was done by NCSA in 2018, they found that
student
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students
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and employees like to work with
lapotops
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laptops
because one device has many
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functions
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insted
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instead
of
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carrying
caring
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numbers
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of
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books
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in their bag. They
also
think that
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the internet
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can clear their doubt within seconds
insted
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instead
wasting
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of wasting
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their time
in
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on
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books
.
However
, most of the
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communities
are
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think that
books
are still holding
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in their heart because they are aware that there are many side effects of using electronic
laptops
and
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computers
.
For instance
,
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know
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that
all
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the time
to work
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on
computer
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the computer
a computer
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is giving
bad
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a bad
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impact on their help. Most
of
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the
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people
are losing their
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.
Moreover
,
laptops
are so costly
as
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compare
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compared
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to
books
that
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is
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why,
people
are still using
books
which
also
help to maintain
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environment.
According to
a media report, 51 per cent
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of folks
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are losing their
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eyesight
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because of having
laptops
all the time in their hand.
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, Government should take some initiative to aware
the
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people
about the bad side of having too much usage of
laptops
and motivate
towords
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towards
books
as it is less costly and helps to
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the
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brain
functions.
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