The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.
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A glance at the bar charts provided reveals information about the number of marriages and divorces between 1970 and 2000,
as well as
the marital status of
adults
in 1970 and 2000 in the United States. As can be seen from the first graph, there was a slight decrease in marriage rates,
while
divorce rates fluctuated throughout the four years.
On the other hand
, the second graph indicates that the majority of the
adults
in the US were married in both years. The number of marriages in 1970 was 2.5
million
and remained unchanged until 1990
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when it went down to approximately 2.3
million
. In 2000, it
also
fell by nearly 3
million
. As for the number of divorces, there was a huge increase of almost 500000 between 1970 and 1980.
However
, it plummeted to just above one
million
in 1990 and remained almost steady in 2000. There was a decrease in the percentage of both married and widowed
adults
in 1970 and 2000,
while
the percentage of people who never married or divorced increased in 2000. In 1970, 70% of the population were married,
while
just below 10% of people were widowed,
although
, in 2000, those percentages fell to about 60 and 5 respectively.
Also
, in 2000, the percentage of unmarried
adults
rose from nearly 15 to 20 and that of divorced
adults
also
had a significant increase of about 6.
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