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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. ​Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. ​Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how much proportion of men and women
are
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working as
a
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faculty in different educational schools in the UK in 2010. Teaching staff involved in six
catgeories
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categories
 of educational groups are given,which comprise the following: preschool, primary school,secondary school,college,private training institute and
university
.
Overall
, it can be seen that more number female teachers are involved in lower grades,
whereas
high
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 number of
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the male
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male
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males
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 are teaching in colleges and
university
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universities
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.
Although
 both are working
in
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all over the educational institutions, women working in
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the nursery
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nursery
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nurseries
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 had the greatest amount, which accounted
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 below 100%. The primary school had 90% of female staff which is the second largest of the total female faculties.
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,
least
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 amount of women staff working in
unveristy
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university
 and accounted for 30%. Looking at the chart, it can be seen that more
number of
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male faculty are teaching in
university
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universities
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 standing at 70% followed by private
insitutions
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institutions
. Whilst, less than 10 % of men are tutoring in lower grades.
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 training institutions and
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the university
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university
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universities
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 had the
second largest
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second-largest
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 teaching faculties of men standing at
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Distribution
  • Gender disparities
  • Educational settings
  • Predominance
  • Representation
  • Societal biases
  • Systemic biases
  • Recruitment
  • Accessibility
  • Work-life balance
  • Societal expectations
  • Perceived suitability
  • Efforts to balance
  • Gender equality
  • Policymakers
  • Educational leaders
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