Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people reading and writing skill Do you agree or disagree

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A fair portion of
people
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thinks that more use of computers and mobile phone for
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has a pessimistic impact on young
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reading and writing.
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essay intends to analyse through technological
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communication
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also
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can be developed. I disagree with the statement.
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communication
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with, computers and mobile phones can enhance
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writing and reading skills through different social media
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platforms
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. To be clearer, through
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public
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people
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can interact with different
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with high
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level
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.
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, the
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is the best social media platform to have good
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english
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with
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person
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people
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.
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, the technology
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will not become a barrier to writing and reading
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Yet another point to be noted is that
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the
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writing and reading
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skill
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skills
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can be
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developed
devolped
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developed
through several
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websites
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and
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and
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the basic function of
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gadget
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To be precise,
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people
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are using
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phones which help them to learn new words
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these days
most of the
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are doing they are daily through the phone
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make
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them more attached towards the language
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mould them to be a better writer and reader
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, the high use of mobile can make
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people
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more
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lazy head because of the assistance which is provided by
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various Artificial intelligence software To be precise, the
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read the text for
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people
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option
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give
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people
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a chance to write their essay without any trouble because of
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the
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will not learn the new
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skill
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sum up
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few
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say that using
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a computer
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computer
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computers
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and electronic
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gadget
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can reduce the
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skill
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, I think that through electronic
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communication
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enhancement can be done and
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