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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people reading and writing skill Do you agree or disagree

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A fair portion of
people
 thinks that more use of computers and mobile phone for
communication
 has a pessimistic impact on young
one's
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 reading and writing.
This
 essay intends to analyse through technological
gadget
communication
also
 can be developed. I disagree with the statement.
To
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communication
 with, computers and mobile phones can enhance
the
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writing and reading skills through different social media
platform
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platforms
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. To be clearer, through
this
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these
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 public
platforms
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,platforms
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people
 can interact with different
people
 with high
communication
level
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levels
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.
For instance
, the
club house
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clubhouse
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 is the best social media platform to have good
in
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apply
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english
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 with
different
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a different
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person
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people
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.
As a result
, the technology
gadget
 will not become a barrier to writing and reading
skill
 Yet another point to be noted is that
,
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the
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writing and reading
skill
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skills
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 can be
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developed
devolped
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developed
 through several
website
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websites
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 and
application
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applications
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 and
also
 the basic function of
this
gadget
 is coded
in
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into
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English
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english
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 To be precise,
the
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people
 are using
the
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phones which help them to learn new words
For example
,
thesedays
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these days
 most of the
people
 are doing they are daily through the phone
this
make
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 them more attached towards the language
thus
 mould them to be a better writer and reader
However
 , the high use of mobile can make
the
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people
more
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apply
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lazy head because of the assistance which is provided by
the
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various Artificial intelligence software To be precise, the
gadget
 read the text for
the
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people
as well as
 there is
autocorrect
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an autocorrect
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 option
this
give
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gives
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people
 a chance to write their essay without any trouble because of
this
 the
people
 will not learn the new
communication
skill
 To
sumup
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sum up
,
although
 few
people
 say that using
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a computer
the computer
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computer
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computers
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 and electronic
gadget
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gadgets
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 can reduce the
communication
skill
, I think that through electronic
gadget
communication
 enhancement can be done and
also
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