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While mobile phones have many advantages, a number of problems have also resulted from them or the way in which they are used. What are some of these problems? What solutions can you suggest for solving these problems?

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Even though
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 mobile
phones
 have many benefits, there are some resulting problems because of using
phones
 that cannot be ignored. In
this
 essay, I will outline some of the reasons that have contributed to these problems
as well as
 some solutions. On the one hand, a serious illness because of using
phones
 is poor sight. Our
phones
 are our true friends in today's world, and we utilize them most of the
time
.
This
 way of using
phones
 weakens our eyes' muscles and causes poor sight.
Moreover
, mobile
phones
 waste our
time
. Most
people
use
phones
 for over 5 hours a day. The usage of our
phones
 is not for calling and texting as before, but we
use
phones
 for watching movies, surfing the internet and keeping in touch with our family and friends. If we do not manage the
time
 that we
use
 the phone,
this
 object can waste our whole
time
.
On the other hand
, governments must teach
people
 how they can
use
phones
 properly. It can hold workshops for adults and teach at schools for younger
people
. When
people
 know how they can
use
 their
phones
 for attaining their goals, they manage their usage
time
 of the
phones
.
In addition
, governments should pass strict rules for socializing with
people
 who are below the age of 18 on social media. Most users of
phones
 are in their twenties and they can be great bait for exploitation. A serious issue that worries parents is to abuse of their children in cyberspace and because of
this
 reason they control their children strictly, but it is not enough. We
also
 need to control the other side of the conversation to protect the future generation from misusing.
This
 control conserves young
people
 from the potential dangers of cyberspace. In conclusion, in spite of the fact that mobile
phones
 have many advantages, their drawbacks can not be overlooked. Poor sight and wasting
time
 are serious problems with
phones
, and government must educate
people
 on how they can
use
phones
 appropriately and whom they can speak to.
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