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The charts below summarise the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia´s share of Japanese tourist market. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below summarise the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia´s share of Japanese tourist market. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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In both graphs, we may appreciate the number of Japanese tourists
traveling
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 outside the country and the number of
japanize
 tourists visiting
Australia
 between 1985 to 1995.
Overall
, the graphs indicate an increasing tendency, inferring that
Australia
 became a popular vacation destination for
japanize
 citizens from 1985 to 1995. A closer look at the number of Japanese population who spent their holidays outside their country increased from 4.000.000 people in 1985 to 16.000.000 in 1995.
On the other hand
,
Australia
´s
japanize
 tourism shows a strong incidence as well, starting at only 2% of Japanese tourists in 1985 to 6% in 1995.
However
, even though there is a significant peak in 1994 in
japanize
 tourism in
Australia
 achieving more than 6%, we may infer that
japanize
 citizens did not choose
Australia
 as a destination for their trip in 1995 as
this
 tendency drop back to 6%. As well, Japan´s population
traveling
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 outside the country increased from 1994 to 1995 increasing to almost 16.000.000 people.
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