The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
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The given table compares the underground railway systems in London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles
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, it is evident that the three oldest underground railway systems were the most significant to
passengers
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and they are large as compared to the new ones.
To begin
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, the Tokyo system was the third oldest opened in 1927 which was 155km of route and was by far the most popular system as 1927
passengers
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used it per year.
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, London and Paris were the first and second oldest systems respectively, they were
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commonly used by commuters with 775 and 1191 million
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respectively. I'm contrast, the newest underground rails routes were shorter and few people utilized them. Los Angeles was by far the latest opened in 2001 and was 28 km of the route which was wide than Kyoto's railroad route.
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, the Los Angeles system conveyed 50 million
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per year as compared to 45 million
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in Kyoto's railroad transport per year.
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