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Percentage of UK people who consumed daily recommended amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given chart shows
proportion
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the proportion
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 of people who ate
recommended
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the recommended
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 amount of
fruit
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 and vegetables every day in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom in 3 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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women
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 had the highest
figures
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while
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 the lowest
figures
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 were seen in
children
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 for the given 3 years.
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, all proportions of men,
women
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 and
children
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 peaked in 2006. From 2002 to 2006, we can see that all
figures
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have
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increased. Specifically, the
percentage
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 of men who ate the recommended daily
fruit
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 and vegetables increased slightly from 22% to 26%, and the
percentage
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 of
women
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 who ate the recommended daily
fruit
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 and vegetable increased by 7% from 25% to 32% and that
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figures
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figure
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 in
children
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 went up dramatically from 11% to 18%. From 2006 to 2010, the chart
was
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witnessed a decrease in all 3 group
figures
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. Specifically, the
percentage
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 of men who ate the recommended daily
fruit
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 and vegetables decreased slightly from 26% to 24%, and the
percentage
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 of
women
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 who ate the recommended daily
fruit
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 and vegetable decreased by 6% from32% to 26% and that
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figures
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 in
children
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 went down slightly from18% to 16%.
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