Some parents are worried about the increasing level of violence in t.v, video games and other types of entertainment for children’s leisure. How does this affect children? How do you think problem can be tackled?

It is considered that many young
children
are revealed by violent
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on
TVs
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, Video games and other social media applications. It is understandable that these strong and
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materials can be popular for all generations, but I believe that they need some limitations, especially for the young. Many studies have shown
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the
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negative
impact of violent material on users
although
they do not want it. At
first,
children
follow the same action
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they see.
For example
, I watched a
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documentary
that some
children
who watched someone hit a doll do the violent action when they meet another doll, but others who watched a doll is complimented do taking care of it
instead
of
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.
Moreover
, When people are exposed to
violent
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situation
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, they could forget some vocabulary
becuase
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because
of the powerful stimulation to the brain. Our brains eliminate positive ideas
due to
negative feelings.
Although
, we all know many problems of
this
situation, it is not easy to solve them. Here are some ways to control the situation. From the start, the easiest method is the block access
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children
who are not supposed to see. We can enact a law about showing
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of access including social
medias
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media
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which are popular for the youth, but there are not many effective laws related to these new communication tools.
Furthermore
, advertisements
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make
young
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generation understand the importance of positive content usage. Controlling and blocking can not cure the root of problems. We can encourage them to protect themselves from the crucial world. In conclusion, I think one point method can not remove the risk of abusing
children
. We need to make a law about
access
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age and let the youth motivate to avoid serious violence. Only keeping an effort of everyone can keep our
children
.
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