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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #lives #change
Reputation is a part of everyone's
life
. some people are of the opinion that stability in their
life
 is important so, there are avoiding from adjustment
whereas
 a majority of people strongly believe that change is always beneficial. I personally hold the view that flexibility in routine activities can mitigate the impact of some mental disorders and can bring many job opportunities from all walks of
life
. A large group of folks firmly believe that not doing the same activities can eliminate some mental issues
such
 as depression and
life
 anxiety.
in other words
, when people try new things in their
life
 they restrict depression and other mental diseases to exacerbate their
life
.
For example
, many years ago Americans started to put a new activity in their
life
 each day that somehow treated
this
 society form
life
 anxiety and depression.
moreover
,
this
 new behaviour helped them to grow in their relationship with others.
In addition
 to a better mentality, the better position opportunity that
this
 group will be faced is another irrefutable reason to try new things. To clarify, new hobbies can bring many job opportunities for folks.
For instance
, Japanese who have started a new activity
such
 as learning a new language can have better chances for find better jobs.
Furthermore
, they used their time to achieve many skills that are required for high positions in large companies. Some nations may claim that flexibility is not good for humans
due to
 having a safe zone in
life
. They think when society has certain behaviour they can build a safe zone for the rest of their
life
.
nevertheless
, what
this
 everlasting and troubling condition yields cannot be overlooked.
To sum up
, some crowd think that it is better to avoid any development in
life
while
 a majority of the community strongly believes that reputation is like poison for human
life
 and changes can be profitable. I firmly believe that changes are so good
due to
 having better job opportunities and mitigating the impact of mental disorders.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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