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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart illustrates the spending and drinking trends of Australian citizens who consumes coffee and tea in five cities including Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart in the
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 4 weeks which resulted from a survey. Information is provided on the percentage of each city's residents.
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, it can be seen that there is a similar pattern among 5 cities. Most Australians,in 4 out of 5 cities, went to the shop and spent time on beverage consumption and the highest proportion was in Melbourne.
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, people who spent money on fresh drinks held the least proportion in the
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 4 weeks with the least number in Brisbane. Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, and Hobart showed similar consuming habits with the highest rate around 55 to 63 for
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 public who drank beverages in café. Followed by 46%, 48%, 53% and 54% of people who bought instant beverages respectively, and the percentage under 45 for citizens who consumed fresh drinks. In Adelaide,
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, Half of the citizens spent money on instant coffee, which is the highest percentage, under 50% went to a café for drink consumption and only under 35% bought fresh coffee over 1 month.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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