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Some students take one years off between school and university.Do advantages outweigh disadvantages??

#students #years #school #university
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There is no doubt that these days a lot of
people
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 get 1
year
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 before
university
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. The question is, What are the negatives and the positives about leaving one
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 between the
university
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 and the
school
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? In
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 essay, I am going to draw some of the advantages and disadvantages. In terms of the advantages, Leaving one
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 between the
university
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 and
school
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 will be good Because the students will get rest and they can think about their future subject. To illustrate, In Saudi ,Arabia 50 per cent of
people
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 have 1
year
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 before
university
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, The student will get enough time to choose their subject.
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, when they have a
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 between the
school
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 and the
university
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 it will give some issues for them.
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, They will lose 1
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 of their life without any achievement.
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, if they get a
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 without any study they will forget what they studied. In conclusion,
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 there are disadvantages, My own view is that we all need to the off it will be our rest and
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 to the
university
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. My opinion is the off it is extremely good
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 us in my country.
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, I believe that the government should take necessary measures to ensure that
people
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 make the right choice of the off between
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 it depends on the person and the differences between the
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