IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8.5

Some people think that it is best to save money for example in a bank or savings schemes. Other people feel that money should be spent whenever it is available, discuss these views and reach an opinion on this debate.

#people #money #bank #savings #schemes #debate
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It is a fact that there has been a debate between
people
 who prefer to save their
money
 in a
bank
 and like to spend their
money
 on something they value. In my point of view, I highly agree that
money
 should be employed appropriately rather than staying in a
bank
. We cannot deny the fact that there are a couple of advantages to saving
money
 in a
bank
.
For instance
, the saved
money
 can be used for an emergency
such
 as a disease. In fact,
according to
 a study conducted by a university,
people
 get relieved by the
money
 itself when they have some savings in their
bank
 account.
However
, these
people
 tend to get unnecessarily anxious about things not happening.
On the other hand
, other
people
 claim that
money
 is only valuable when it is used properly
otherwise
 it is only a piece of paper or number. In accordance with recent research taken by several organisations, it is revealed that a large number of
people
 would like to invest their
money
 in something they regard as worthy,
instead
 of saving it.
Further
, approximately 80% of the respondents agreed that
people
 get more satisfaction and feel rewarded when they use
money
 as they want. In conclusion,
although
 both supporters and opponents of saving
money
 have their own reasonable grounds for their arguments, I believe that
money
 should be used appropriately as
money
 does not exist for itself, but for the owner. Before
money
 existed, our ancestors traded their items with others for something they needed.
Money
 was invented for exactly the same purpose as trade.
Submitted by minuri.kim on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: